Friday, August 19, 2011

Sangmin - Fanfic



One piece - After the death

“W, where am I?, I’m still alive?” 

Ace spoke quietly. However, Ace has found the gravestone and it is written on ‘ Rest In Peace, Ace’.

“Hmm.. Yeah. I’m dead. Just want to go back and stay with Luffy but it’s too late. Anyway, how can I feel the pain? my back is really sore.”

Strangely, he felt painful even he died. He was walking around his grave and thinking of the past about Luffy and other funny memories but he knew that's too late to be back to the real. Magically, he could go any places he hopes to go. As always, he was looking back the past about the restaurant and he was in there immediately. He was looking around for delicious food, sitting on the chair and pretending to eat. However, that's impossible to eat because he is ghost. By the way, he heard munching sound on the back and old woman who was awfully ugly and eating like a pig. Ace giggled and blamed in the face. Of course he thought that she can't hear what he says. However, that old woman looked onto Ace for a moment and went back to eating.

“Can she see me?”

Ace said and wondered whether she recognized or not but Ace didn’t matter because Ace thought the human can’t see the ghost. Once more, Ace blamed her again and she looked Ace and smiled.

“ Can you see me? " 

“Y.E.S” the old woman said slowly.

After he heard the word ‘yes’, Ace fell backward and cried out in surprise.

“ THE GHOST!!!! . Ah, I’m ghost, too. Then who the hell are you? How come you see me?”

“I’m the messenger from the king of the underworld. Of course, I’m not human and I’m not ghost as well”.

“Then, why are you here? Is there anything I did wrong?”

“Yes, you are. You must go to the king of the underworld but you are not. That’s what you did wrong.”

“I see, I’m going there now.”

“wait, I’m still talking to you.”

The old woman blocked Ace the way and pushed him back.

“Listen to me, before you go to the king of the underworld, I suggest good deal for you.”

As Ace heard what she said, he turned over and came closer to the old woman.

“What deal?”

The old woman went to sit on the chair again and looked up to Ace.

“If you bring back to me the ghost who I want, then I’ll get you back to the world because you shouldn’t be dead yet so this is kind of my help.” 

“Haha, that’s easy. Let me know where that damn ghosts.”

“That’s not easy, most revenants are really stronger than you because their ability is like a marine executives. You still want it?”

“There’s no choice. I have to do unless I can’t go back to the world.”

“all right. First of all, bring me back gold-lion siki. He was a rival with Gold.D.Roger and your father white beard. Unfortunately, He was killed by a rookie and being resentment. Can you do that?”

“hmm, Killed by rookie…… what’s his name?”

“Monkey. D. Luffy.”

“Hahaha, I’m going to bring him back within one week. Just wait and take a coffee.”

“What an arrogant boy. The deal will be over next week. Don’t forget.”

“Don’t worry! I’ll get it back within 3days.”

The old woman didn’t understand why he so confident but she didn’t care because she was surely expected that’s impossible.
After a week, the old woman was eating food in restaurant as always. The time was running and the dark came onto the restaurant. 

“Expectably, he was just an arrogant. I was stupid that I believed.”

The old woman stent up from the chair and was going to go out . When she was opening the door, the young man blocked the way her and the young man said.

“where are you going old woman? I think our deal has finished.”

The young man was Ace and someone was on his shoulder.

“Is he gold-lion siki?”

“Yes.” Ace said.

“How…… How come you can beat him? He’s much stronger than you.”

The old woman looked like unbelievable.

“No, you were wrong. That rookie who killed siki is my younger brother Luffy and I haven’t lost him since we were a child.”

The old woman laughed loudly and asked Ace.

“Your younger brother.. then, what’s your full name?”

“Portgus. D. Ace.”

At that moment, the old woman looked like frozen and laughed loudly.

“What a ‘D’ people..‘D’ people never made me disappointment. Your real dad G. D. Roger was the one of my boy. Whatever, the deal is succeeded and I’ll get you out of here.”

“Yeah!!. It was really exciting experience but I don’t want to do that again. Anyway, I gotta go now!! Thank you for helping me!!”

“Haha See you next time.”

“What? NO!! I don’t like the word ‘next time’ and I’ll rub you out in my memory~"

Sangmin - Fanfic reviews

Bleach - The Morning After


This fan fiction is set a beginning of the day between Ichigo and Rukia. Rukia wants Ichigo to wake up and go to school but Ichigo doens't want to so the episode starts from fighting between them and finishes happy ending.

I like how the writer describe the fighting scene. It is detailed and the dialog makes me imagine how they fight clearly. The development goes on smoothly and easy to understand. 






This Fan Fiction is focused on viewpoint of shelock's mother that shows normal conversation between a little Shelock with illness and his mother. It describes how Shelock was in childhood.

The interesting point that I feel freshness is Shelock spends normal childhood. In the original Shelock is flake, cold and flunt person but this fan fic shows a little shelock who can act irritated to mother as normal child. The personality of shelock is totally different compared with the original that I feel.



This fan fiction is not owned the original story of anime/manga series GTO (Great Teacher Onizuka). Onizuka  is just  blacked out by new student during the class time, Ms. Fuyutsuki is kidnapped by Onizuka's motorbike Kawasaki Z750RS Z2 which new student is stolen.

Not much to say about this fan fic because it looks unfinished. However, the conversation between each characters is written good enough and describes the feature of characters is used the original very well.



This scenario is involved the movie '2012', written from 5months after massiv  disaster. People who stay in the Noah's ark, think about rebuilding the world and shows confliction each other about how they are going to live.

This story gives a hint what people have to do after the disaster has been occured which means the writer surely knows the original scenario very well. Nice expressed that the survivor feels disappointment, frustration and highly-elated each person by conversation.



The winner of Suzuran war is Takiya Genji and GPS between Tamao's corps and Takiya tried to fight with Lindamann for the real captain of Suzuran but he lost everytime. Finally, he requested to Tamao to fight again because he thought that the war totally effected by GPS, not only him so he faught with Tamao again.

This piece is not quiet long, even if this is actional fan fiction, it is already I expected mostly and conclusion is unclear. Everything is expectable conversations so I feel no tension about it. However, the conversation is realistic and it covers lack of description. Therefore, what I would suggest to writer that needs to be new character and it would be freshness. 


Brooklyn's Fanfic


The last gold sparks flew and it was over. She was back to her human form forever and before she knew it, she sat in her throne beside the fun-sized king Lord Farquaad who everyone now knew as her husband. But even thought she chose it, this was not the life that she wanted because Fiona was still madly in love with Shrek.

"And you are going where?" Lord Farquaad asked,

"Oh, you know just to the markets" Fiona replied,

"Well I should expect you home soon then my dear, you know you've been going there an awful lot but you have nothing to show for it."

Fiona didn't care what he said, nor could she turn around any quicker. She wasn't headed for the markets like she said, she never was. She was off to the swamp to see Shrek and like other days, that's all she did before she arrived home.

"Hello darling, what did you buy from the markets?" Her husband asked, giving her the skeptical eyebrow raise.

Fiona got closer before she replied,

"Oh I-" She began before being cut off,

"Ugh! You absolutely reek of something disgusting! Please, do something about it right away!" He demanded before walking off.

Fiona's eyes couldn't have rolled back any further. She couldn't stand looking at Lord Farquaad let alone understand why she even married him. Was it worth all this just to put a stop the curse that had her evolving into an ugly ogre every sunset? She began to realize how selfish she was for leaving Shrek, who still loved her. But due to her love for Shrek, Fiona's lies became more and more frequent.

"I'm going back to the markets they finally have what I was looking for"

"And that is?" Lord Farquaad asked skeptically,

"You wouldn't want to know and it wouldn't matter to you anyhow"

"Darling, I'm asking aren't I?"

"Yes, but I..." She began before she was interrupted

"Ok look Lacey, let’s not beat around the bush I know that you’ve been seeing that disgusting ogre, Shrek!”

“Excuse me? I don’t know what you’re on about”

“Let’s make this clear, you are not to go anywhere you are to stay indoors! Guards!"

Without mercy the two guards immediately yanked one arm each forcing her upstairs, her ponytail whipping in the air behind her,

"NO! Let me go! Stop! STOP!"

Before she knew it, she was locked in the room which had to be the one with nothing but one window with a latch that looked impossible to release. She began pacing up and down, screaming for someone to let her out, she did not want imprisoned once again.

"Help!" She called but no one answered.

Not thinking, Fiona charged into the window, rebounding onto the floor yes she got up again and and pounded it.

“What are you doing?”

Fiona’s face turned white at the sound of Lord Farquaad’s voice,

“What are you doing keeping me up here like this?"

Without a word, Lord Farquaad pushed her to the ground and how someone so small did that to her, she could not fathom. In an instant, he tugged and her arm in an attempt to drag her.

“Let me go!” She protested, so much anger in her tone,

“Oh I gave you back your life and now you will stay with me!”

“This is not my life! I made a mistake!”

Lacey threw him off of her, sending him flying into the wall, his head bouncing twice against it as he slid down the rest of the way, yet he sprung back into life.

"Stop Fiona and things will be fine" He declared calmly whilst positioning himself into self defense mode, quickly whisking a piece of hair away from his face.

“Shrek!” Fiona cried,

“Oh you and that Shrek!” he yelled, lunging at Fiona full force, an attempt to bring her down,

“Get off me!” Fiona pleaded, trying to peel him off of her.

Fiona swung around with Lord Farquaa's small boday dangling off of her. She forced him to the window, knocking his head onto the window latch twice. His head flung back forward and then he stopped. His blank face dropped to his chest, no more movement coming from him.

"Farquaad?" She asked waiting for a reply, depserate for an answer.

As fear began to consume her, Fiona stood back in horror as she watched blood trickle from Lord Farquaad's head.

Wednesday, August 17, 2011

Excel's fanfic: Kings, Queens, and Subjects

A/N: I've put the rest under a cut so that it doesn't kill the page. :) Just click the "Read more" to read the rest.


This is Code Geass crossed over with Mean Girls.


Kallen Stadtfeld
Kaname Ougi
Shinichirou Tamaki


Lelouch vi Britannia
Kururugi Suzaku
C.C.





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KINGS, QUEENS, AND SUBJECTS



Ashford Academy.

Due to the nature of her father’s diplomatic duties for the Britannian embassy, the red-haired, blue-eyed Kallen Stadtfelt moved around quite often as a child, and had never attended any educational institution. Initially, her father had turned his nose up at the idea of Kallen attending the local high school (“She’s a Stadfeldt – she should have private tuition!) but Kallen’s mother had persuaded him to allow Kallen to socialise with people her own age.  So there she was, clad in uniform with a piece of buttered toast in her mouth, regulation school bag slung over her shoulder, and standing outside the tall iron gates, looking in.

Calm down, Kallen. It’s just school.

Guy Final Draft: Gintama The Final Episode - Accepted by Many


Important information for those unfamiliar with the Gintama/Naruto:
  • The Yorozuya is the home and business where Gintoki, Kagura and Shinpachi live.
  • Sunrise is the animation studio that produces Gintama.
  • Konoha village is the main setting in Naruto.
  • Naruto possesses the ability to clone himself.
  • Most episodes of Gintama end with a short episode of ‘Ginpachi Sensei’.



The episode starts at the Yorozuya.

“Doof! Doof! Doof!”

Gintama wakes to a violent knocking at the door,

“Gyaaah, who’s pounding at my door so early? What a pain, Kagura?”

Silence,

“Kagura!”

More silence.

The knocking returns, slightly louder this time,

“..KAGURAAA!”

“WHAT!?”

“Get the door you lazy idiot!”

Neither notice Shinpachi get the door as they are too busy fighting.

Shinpachi opens the door to see a Sunrise company official towering above him. He looks at Shinpachi with disapproval.

Shinpachi’s face fades to white. The white then spreads across the rest of his body as he becomes a crude pencil sketch.

The official mutters words of disgust to himself, Shinpachi hears nothing.

Shinpachi snaps back to reality and quickly starts talking,

“I’m sorry, I tried, I really did but before I knew what was happening Gintoki had already set fire to the...”

“That's not why I’m here” interrupts the official,

“Of course, I mean, I’m sorry that Kagura attacked the...”

“That's not why I’m here either!”

“You mean the incident with the boat and the chainsaw?”

“NO SHUT UP AND LET ME SPEAK!”

Shinpachi stands shocked,

“I’m here to remind you that this show is being taken off the air today and that your timeslot has been given to the show ‘Naruto’. Of course you are aware of this after the multiple warnings we sent you?”

The official looks back at Shinpachi’s empty face,

“llletters?”

“I am a very busy man; you have received more than enough warning. In fact, from henceforth you have 10 minutes to clear your belongings before this show legally becomes Naruto.”

The official leaves as Shinpachi stands frozen.

 Shinpachi turns to Gintoki and Kagura who are deep in a wrestling match in the now ruined living room. Gintoki stops and looks at him casually over the choke hold he has on Kagura,

“What’s wrong otaku?”

Shinpachi erupts into a fit of rage and leaps into the wrestle landing a square punch in the faces of both Gintoki and Kagura.

The group fight until there is very little left still standing in the room.

After about 10 minutes they become tired and stop fighting. Shinpachi and Gintoki lay on the floor panting,

“I’ve almost forgotten why this fight even started, also, Shinpachi, what do you have to do with all this?

“Letters, letters!” Shinpachi pants,

“Letters?” Gintoki pants back,

"Yes letters! What happened to all the letters from Sunrise?"

Kagura butts in, on her feet,

“They looked so boring, so I used them to light the fire.”

Shinpachi stares speechless, at the unfazed Kagura. His face starts to swell and turns red with anger.

Gintoki quickly butts in,

“What!? We don’t even have a fireplace!”

“You’re so fussy. I just made one on the floor over there”

Kagura lifts up a rug to reveal the remains of a bonfire amoungst burnt skirting boards.

Shinpachi’s briefly passes out and falls down. Neither Gintoki nor Kagura pay it any attention.

Upon returning to consciousness Shinpachi sits up, out of breath.  

“The man at the door was an official from Sunrise. He said in 10 minutes our show is being taken of the air. I saw it coming but to that that stupid yellow haired kid?”

“Um, how long were you two fist fighting for? “Kagura asks with a face of innocence.

The three stop in thought as the back wall of the room they are sitting in is removed by a sunrise employee revealing the main high street of Konoha.

Shinpachi notices, he screams and points. Gintoki turns around and screams similarly.

Gintoki and Shinpachi both stand and walk towards the set as another wall is taken down by Uzumaki Naruto displaying the Ichiraku Ramen shop.

Gintoki turns around,

“Ka..”

He notices that Kagura is no longer there.

Characters from Naruto start to walk around carrying lights and props. Naruto walks in carrying a large light, another carries a tree. 3 more walk in carrying between them a large statue of Naruto grinning furiously. Various other clones remain, hammering walls and placing scenery.

Gintoki runs over to one of the clones hammering at a tree and grabs him,

“Oi! Stop hammering, this is my show; take your shadow clones and your stupid voice to another time slot!”

“This is our show now, believe it!”

“Aaagh” Gintoki covers his ears “Shut up!”

“Never, it’s my way of the ninja, you better believe it!”

“GO AWAY!” Gintoki screams pulling out his wooden sword.

Upon seeing Gintoki draw, Naruto starts weaving seals with his hands, performing various impossible to create shapes. He takes a little while to do so.

“Are you swearing at me or something?”

“Annoying technique!”

There is silence as the two characters stare at each other awkwardly.

Gintama screams,

“Ooooww! Ooh man that stinks! You stupid yellow headed freak, why would you do that? If I were some kind of..” Gintoki pauses to think “dog-man... thing, I would not be happy right now.”

Gintoki crawls away disgusted,

“Shinpachi? Shinpachi!.. Kagura?”

Gintoki crawls down the street until he reaches Ichiraku Ramen. Seeing two familiar pairs of feet under the blinds, he storms in seeing Kagura and Shinpachi wearing Konoha Ninja headbands with their faces in bowls of ramen.

“What are you doing you sell outs, can’t you see we’re at war here? “ “Oi listen to…”

Gintoki is interrupted by the commencement of the Naruto ending theme; the theme is very similar to the original except Kagura and Shinpachi are included.

The episode ends with an episode of Ginpachi-Sensei.

Gintoki stands looking unenthusiastic at the front of Naruto’s class at the Konoha ninja academy.

He says nothing.

Episode Ends.